Hi its me again; you guys told me to write!!! So here it is!!! (Am I a good writer 2)?

If she is in hell how can she have a body? And a skeleton's hip bone would not make you instantly start to cough up blood unless it gave you internal bleeding. If it did you should elaborate that more instead of just "and then I started ot cough up blood." Also, it would help to elaborate on the "voice from above" is it masculine or feminine? all in all, it is a pretty good start. I am also a 13 year old writing a book so good job! :D